The Real Jack and Jill

Jack and Jill 

In a dormant forrest cabin entrenched in damnable mystery
Inhabited by two licentious figures of fabled history 
Lurking torpid between gullies and ravines 
Capturing their unsuspecting victims clean
 
An unassuming couple snatched while taking a walk
Their bodies disembowelled, their eyes popped out like corks
Immobilised they arouse from deepened slumber
Victimised from the barbarity the victims  wonder
 
Jack dicing flesh as they dissect her consort 
Wrenching his bones, leaving his body badly contort 
Psychotic eyes peruse over her numb cadaver with a grin
With a meat cleaver Jill unfolds her like a sardine tin 
 
Jack feasts on her intestines 
Snorting them like cocaine lines 
Slurping on her fleshy bones
Like a summer ice cream cone
 
Jill jeers at her traumatic cries
As her forked tongue whips her eyes 
Trickling her fingernails down her face
Exuberant and agog on how she'll taste 
 
Chewing at her shoulder blade like homemade toffee
Jack drains her blood and drinks it down like coffee 
Her abdomen Jack plunges his face and buries his teeth
Wearing her skin around his neck like a wreath 
 
Jack sharpens his blade as he carves off her ears 
Masticating on her lobes like freshly picked pears
His whiskers firm like a bottle brush 
As her arteries are turned to slush
 
Jills sharp teeth like a row of broken bottles 
Plunging her infested ridden teeth into her wattle 
Blood gushing down her face like a waterfall
As blood splatters like paint over the cabin walls
 
Jack and Jill went up the hill
To torment and kill 
 
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Comments (25)

  1. tiggers

    Wow this is very different lol not the one I remember great job my friend

    May 25, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Hahaha yeah the last dark writing haha just changing things up

      May 25, 2016
      1. tiggers

        LOL it was awesome

        May 25, 2016
        1. wonderwall79

          thanks my friend

          May 25, 2016
          1. tiggers

            You are very welcome

            May 25, 2016
  2. williamwatts

    You peeking into my dreams, or so it may seem. Very good I hope one day to write as well.

    May 25, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Hahah you never know I might have telepathic abilities
      I can’t wait my friend I hope you do write something

      May 25, 2016
  3. morningafter7

    Well this is quite a twist on the original classic, to say the least! Terrifyingly done, wonderwall!

    May 25, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Hahah yeah too much time on me hands I think, thanks as always my friend

      May 25, 2016
  4. cjb321

    Good Heavens! You have gone from the heights to the depths here. Well done!

    May 25, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Hahaha yeah thanks
      Well I can only go up from here

      May 25, 2016
      1. cjb321

        You are a very prolific writer. Keep up the good work.

        May 25, 2016
        1. wonderwall79

          I’m a weekend hacker at best haha but I pull down my brim in respect to a wordsmith legend

          May 25, 2016
  5. zilla007

    absolutely loved this..I love your mind …. your imagination is fascinating … write more

    May 26, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Again I thank you, for your kind words.!!
      As well to take the time to read my little writings a pleasure as always

      May 27, 2016
  6. macabre360

    A feast to rival that of any legendary beast.
    A fairytale of the damned if ever there be one.
    Puts Mother goose in on the run
    And the brothers Grim though dark were never quite as fun.
    A exquisite gory bedtime story for all ages. He he he

    May 27, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      The last dark tale I have to be told.
      Back to my prairie looking for gold.
      Just thought I’d visit your realm for a while.
      To change it up and bring a few smiles.
      I’m surely no master it’s best left for the few.
      No one paints a picture quite like you.
      I nod my brim and climb on my horse
      Thy honour was all mine black bird

      May 27, 2016
  7. dreamshadow59

    Great, now I have to worry about Fairy Tale Nightmares…Yikes!!! :-0

    May 27, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Hahahah it’s ok that was my first and last haha, just imagine Snow White or the seven dwarfs

      May 27, 2016
      1. dreamshadow59

        I shudder to think…

        May 27, 2016
        1. wonderwall79

          Haha now you have me thinkin

          May 28, 2016
          1. dreamshadow59

            Ohhhh Noooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

            May 28, 2016
            1. wonderwall79

              Lol don’t worry my mind is stuck else where lol

              May 28, 2016
  8. celine2

    Eek!

    May 28, 2016
    1. wonderwall79

      Haha I’ve got a warped mind

      May 28, 2016